Revision Plan
Based on the feedback from the instructor, there are several positives that I can point out and draw strength and encouragement from as far as the course is concerned. These areas include the introduction, grammar, source integration, and conclusion. However, on the same breathe, various vital areas remain contentious as their grading was never close to being perfect. These three areas are the paragraph development and organization of the ideas in work. In paragraph development, my work has consistently fallen below the threshold of what the perfect assignment entails. In most cases, it has never gone beyond 7.5 points. Such an aspect translates to it in need of more development and the points tied back to the thesis sentence. Additionally, there should be more examples backing the claims, and the examples must be well-developed. On the organization of the sentence, several works I have submitted falls under the 7.5 score as well. In this regard, the paper lacks clarity, cohesion, and flow. Such an aspect needs several remedial measures to be put in place.
Several interventions could be effectively put in place to improve the paragraph structure and the organization of the work. First, in dealing with paragraph structure, there is a need to develop a strong thesis statement and using the linkage sentences to link the backing sentences with the thesis statement (Bueno Hernandez, 2016). In that regard, the main point in each paragraph must be aligned with the topic sentence. Again, there is a need to expand the central idea to be extended to exhibit a greater depth of critical thought backed up with persuasive examples in place (Bueno Hernandez, 2016). The examples must be varied and contextually right. On the other hand, in dealing with the shortcomings that emanate from the organization of the work, measures should be put in place to ensure that the introduction and the conclusion directly relate to the flow of the concepts in the paper (White, 1985). There must be coherence, clarity, and well the general flow of the work.
References
Bueno Hernandez, Y. A. (2016). Thinking, crafting, and commenting: an approach to improving paragraph structure writing (Master’s thesis, Universidad de La Sabana).
White, E. M. (1985). Teaching and Assessing Writing: Recent Advances in Understanding, Evaluating, and Improving Student Performance. The Jossey-Bass Higher Education Series. Jossey-Bass Publishers, 433 California St., Suite 1000, San Francisco, CA 94104-2091.